***Another experiment in rewriting. I will be digging into my archives soon to do more. This is my project now.***
Original “The Green and My Heart” (written sometime last week):
I adore you
The way the hesitant breeze
Disturbs
The leaves on a sunny high blue day
In the wooly heat of midsummer:
Warmly and gently,
And almost without detection.
Unless you close your eyes
To feel the movements
Of the green
And my heart.
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Rewrite “The Green of My Heart”:
Adoring the waves of you in my internal bloodsea is easier than an effortless wind that doesn’t need a single breath to blow into your heart.
The introverted breeze swallows itself and disturbs no one but the water in a leaf and the water in your cells,
And the only sky I see is the one in your eyes.
In your eyes… in your living soulstorming eyes whose gaze heats me like a wooly itching summer that has me molting out of my skin and into
You
Like you are my new skin (like I never had my own),
And I am now forever your hand upon your cheek.
And when I can’t find the sun above my head,
I look towards the sound of your breathing heartwind,
And always towards the you in the green of my heart.
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❤👽xoxoxo👽❤
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*** To sweet summer… fare thee well. ***
I like them both, but I like the first edition best!
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Thanks Brad ❤
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My pleasure!
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I like both versions of your text. They are as beautiful as the other. 😍
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Thank you ❤
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